I want this fanfic piss reviewed so I can gague how good it is (obviously). On my table, though, in place of "humor", I want "suspense". THX! ------TheDragonManChase the Dragon! 01:35, 12 February 2008 (UTC) 19:11, 12 February 2008 (UTC)
ok, sorry about the long delay in doing this review. Things got a bit bogged down in the PEEING trenches
(AKA: Suspense) Humor is not too prevalent here, but the suspense was much better. If you want this article to survive, you will have to put more humor in. Uncyclopedia is about spoofing/humor/parody, and it behooves you to add a bit more. That being said, the story by itself is good, and i enjoyed it.
I remember Spyro...cute little dragon. I understand what you did, which was to basically cut/paste your story to here, but improvement is needed to fit it to 'wiki' standards.
Prose and formatting:
Try to keep your tense the same thruout the story. You move out of 3rd person past or present quite a few times. It's minor, but needs some correction. Also, you should provide some links, as you have absolutely none at present. Also, put your chapters in == == mode, so you get the correct formatting. Fix these and your score will go up a lot.
no images whatsoever...fix please.
average of the above 4 scores, and coincidentally, the exact number of flames i can eject from my butt after eating 3 pounds of jalepeno peppers.
As you can see, your scores are a bit on the low side, but most of it is merely because the story does not reflect 'wiki' style. Some images and links will surely make your score jump exponentially. Work on it, using my suggestions, and resubmit it. I'm sure your scores will improve.