Let me know what you think of my blatant ripoff of the Cap'n's work. This shit is bananas. pillow talk 23:18, 18 May 2009 (UTC)
Very, very funny, Not a whole lot to criticise here really and that’s actually the main problem. It was all over just as you really seemed to get going. I’d like to see more. At least five or six more should probably be OK without over doing the joke. Try looking at Lilly Allen for (British) songs (this one is currently quite popular), or Avril, maybe Paramore’s Misery Business.
Like you said the concept was borrowed but I think you carried it off so much better because you stuck to the truth but phrased it in such a funny manner, that works even if the reader doesn't know the songs. Can’t actually suggest anything about changing it. If anything it’s maybe too simple for some people’s taste.
Prose and formatting:
A little cut back here because of formatting. You have a lot of white space which can irk people (personally I’m not fussed) to sort this you could split the page into two columns. Maybe remove the contents page and first image.
They were kinda average. Not horrible but not hilarious either. They were all relevant though. They were a bit small (particularly the London Bridge one was a bit hard to make out) but I can also see that making them much bigger would create more white space.
Averaged. Sorry if this doesn’t seem like much help, but like I said the actual content, the important stuff, was all very funny and the only thing I’d like is to see some more of it. I do think that this would easily be VFH, if that’s what you were after. Also I’ve done two reviews for you now, would you mind returning the favour? :)
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