The latest Imperial Colonisation. Not quite finished, but I think we'd all appreciate a pee review please. --BlackFlamingo 20:20, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
I'm doing this review now. As noted, this is Puppy's last colonisation before the rise of Qzekrom. Now I plan to replicate Qzekrom's success. |Si PlebiusDato' (Sir)Joeang AussieCUN|ICKill| 10:37, June 21, 2012 (UTC)
The humour is relevant through the article. I like it how it has flowed. The punchlines are timed right, there is some rapid-fire comedy here and there, and a lot of thought has been put in by Puppy On The Radio (pre-Lyrithya hate era) and the IC cronies. Infact, I would like to point on what makes this article funny, what make this article related to Charles Manson, and why Jesus wants to send Manson in Hell to be cooked, then eaten by the Devil's cronies:
Lede: Good use of humour here. Unfortunately, there is a bit of fact there, but as they say, truth is funny.
The main subheadings: They contain a lot of fact, but twisted to the point that it is funny. In fact, in the Heyday section, this hit the sweet spot completely: "The Band Formerly Known as Feedback officially changed its name to You Too in 1980, when The Edge discovered that Bono shared the same sexual fetish as he. The name was hastily shortened to U2--a seemingly meaningless combination before the age of text messaging--to avoid suspicion from the rest of the band, who were a notoriously vanilla group." They used a reference to Prince's naming convention during the 90's, and mocked the band's name because 'you'=U, and 'too'=2, and hinting that they named it way before text messaging was invented.
Reaction: No other article has done this really well. I couldn't say anymore because it looks half-finished. I feel like there is something missing in this damn article.
Notes: I loved this part, "Bono will later find himself to be accused of tax evasion. U2 haters and everyone else shouted "Give us our fucking money back!" at Bono once during a concert." I know, I wrote it myself, but this is the best part to a swansong to an article whose IC has been mired by controversies, a corrupt leader and weeks of mismanagement, only to come up with this. Infact, remember Geldof's "Give us your fucking money?" This is an allusion and nice joke to this band.
Talk page: During the course of the construction, we talked about what we want to add to the page. It gets a bit funny, but so far, it is the only serious shit on the page.
The concept, depicting the band's history and formation, as well as the lead singer, has been well thought out. This is an unfinished concept, though. There has been a lot of thought put in towards the stuff that Bono did like charity work, and some controversies, like the Super Bowl Halftime show, the tax evasion which is placed right at the bottom, and of course, what the band did during its heyday and their hits. I am confused by the concept though, even though I had worked on this article in absentia.
Prose and formatting:
The formatting done is very good. Seeing as this is Puppy's last colonisation before the drama that is similar to NXWave's of 2008, the formatting is higher than average. The use of reference tags to give the punchline is a good idea, and should be recommended to be done by joke makers at all costs. I believe that the good use of the formatting had contributed to the reason why I gave this score. On the prose side, the words and sentences had flowed through well, there are paragraphs, and the looks are really uncluttered. The problem? It is unfinished.
The use of images are really relevant to this article. The one-liners that are used for the images are humorous. The third image is of great approval because they depict the band members wearing sunglasses like Bono, hence the tagline, "We're Bono4". The other images? Well, the Bono one needs a better caption than the current caption about his mind control. I was suggesting something along the lines of "Bono trying to be Jesus, but really failed due to Bono's mortal origins".
The score is an average just to be sure how well you are doing this right.
You could say that I worked a bit on this article, as I lead this. But I consider myself to be a corrupt, useless leader, and the project was mired for weeks in an abandoned state, until you came in. Now all we need is to finish this goddamn article, but I checked the history and they are continuing to edit this so that the article is finished.