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Please review. Geoffprickett 20:35, 27 September 2008 (UTC)

I don't have time for a full review now, but NEEDS MOH PICS!!! I like the song/album names at the end... MrN Icons-flag-gb HalIcon.png WhoreMrn.png Fork you! 20:45, Sep 27
I can't be arsed to do a full review but it passed the "made me laugh out loud" test. MollyTheCat 22:08, 27 September 2008 (UTC)
I'm not sure that's qualification enough to apply for vfh, but thanks for your input, cat. Geoffprickett 06:36, 28 September 2008 (UTC)
Not bad, may need a few pictures (perhaps a fake album cover) but otherwise very good.Striker21179:02, 28 September 2008(UTC)
I can't be arsed to do a full review, eith- oh what the hell, I've already hit the button anyway. --Nachlader 19:33, 2 November 2008 (UTC)
Humour: 8 A decent article that didn't fail to make me laugh without end, as well as unique in humour, plentiful in material and yet spacious for expansion in all areas. I wish I could say that my grieviences with the article are minor, but that would put me in mind of a cow's udder bursting with sour milk. However, the article is excellently thought of in terms of humour and the 'Discography' section is a genius finish to the article that gives tired eyes a good ol' list to look at. Impressive, considering the article is rife with unattractive one liners, sparse images and a near extreme level of English rural-bashing, all of which could be remedied. There are some problems which are critical to the length that they stop me from nominating the article.
Concept: 7 A good concept. But (and a big but), to be honest I wouldn't think much of it at first, and even with the idea having been executed fairly well, I'm still uneasy. A satire article on an English country band that describes it's genre as "Scrumpy and Western", that isn't even well known. From a distance, the only way I'd try and get a decent article out of such a topic would be to resort to anti-rural England farmers, country musicians and the like. Animosity humour and stereotypes are hard for me to find funny, however, this article has been directed away from the crass department of random unfunny culture bashing, showing that you have eloquently and superbly served the article on a fine dish, rather than like a head on a platter like most stereotype articles. I suppose my snag with the concept is that is that the actual band, The Wurzels isn't totally well known, even with some British people (if it is, then consider my life a shadow beneath a rock. I'm confident that it isn't so), and that the rural stereotyping humour is something that could be applied for many, many other articles, so the exclusivity of jokes is somewhat disputed, know what I mean?

In essence, I'd suggest making the article a bit more open about it's nature. If you can imply with the power of words in the article and set the record straight that this article has such stereotyping sentiments about country bands, I'd be a bit more at ease, I reckon.

Prose and formatting: 7 Somewhat painfully close. The actual content is constant and absolutely brilliant, but has the organisation of an angry mob protesting the laws on birth control. Bodies of words called "paragraphs" are obviously things that are killed at birth according to this article, with mutated fetuses of one liners, born from prostitutes, being saved from abortion and being allowed to live such solitary lives, when such impish things could be easily linked to one another and then potentially give life to one awesome whole of a paragraph.

Furthermore, if the quotations were given directions to where they needed to go on the article, half of them obviously got lost on the journey and ended up in the middle of illegitimate one liners or in the wrong sections. The '{{|cquote}}' tagged quote in 'Discography' is safely and wonderously positioned in the incubator, but the two '{{|q}}' quotes that are in the latter section and in the middle of some one liners towards the end of the introduction are some ugly ducklings that need to grow into beautiful swans. Such an acheivement could be pulled off if the '{{|q}}' quotes are either turned to the care of foster families and looked after by '{{|cquote}}' parents, so that they may be given an upbringing to live for. Or, preferably, the two quotes could be turned over to their natural habitat; the very top of articles, the pond wherein the beautiful swans live, so they may grow from their disgusting and illegal births into such handsome, white creatures (that's enough birth puns now).

I would suggest that the quotes are pointed to the right direction or just edited to seperate '{{|cquote}}' instead. Also, and this may prove the difference in the score, sew the one liners together to create full paragraphs. These will make the article look less amateurishly put together (much like my invention of non-existing words).

Images: 6 Not images enough for the article. The score is definately harsh, I realise, but it shows how much of a difference there is, between having enough images depending on the length of the article, and having too little images for an otherwise plentiful content of words. Readers will pull away from forcing their eyes to read your article if there isn't a little incentive on the side, an image, to keep them going.

However, the images you chose are excellent and fit the article snugly, not to mention the well tailored captions. It seems to me that you could easily find more pictures like these, along with some tasty captions and therefore cure the image defiecieny.

Miscellaneous: 7 Average'd.
Final Score: 35 A rare case, I should think, of a concept that I'd find hard to develop, but yet turned out to be a humourous article. It's not without it's hindrances, but nobody's perfect. Give my suggestions a thought or two and get back to rewriting the article. This is a potential VFH.

(If there are any typos I've missed out in this review, blame it on my jet lag.)

Reviewer: --Nachlader 19:33, 2 November 2008 (UTC)
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