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Right I'm stuck, I know I should go at this at different admins, however I want an admin only review, if you're not an admin. DO NOT REVIEW THIS!The preceding signed comment was added by Projectmayhem666 (talk • contribs). 16:50, 4 March 2009 (UTC)

A few additions have been added and the help is appreciated, anyone can review this now. Remember this is a very big project and is not yet finished, so don't be too harsh. --The preceding signed comment was added by Projectmayhem666 (talk • contribs). 11:52, 13 March 2009 (UTC)
Humour: 7 Alright, since it's obviously not finished, I had to go on what I saw. But that didn't really matter, because what I saw what quite hilarous. You'd have to be around here a while to get any of these jokes, but they're nonetheless very good. My main pet peeve was all the quotes. Too many Oscar Wilde ones-try and fix that.
Concept: 9 Ahh yes, the elusive concept. very rarely is there an article on Admins that doesn't contain sentences along the lines of "ROMAN DOG BIRD IS A STUPID NIGGER" or "MORDILLO IS A FILTHY JEW", and rarely do these authors stay on Uncyclopedia for more than a few days. Kudos for creating an article about admins that has real humor in it.
Prose and formatting: 4 Well...sorry, but it was terrible. There are many errors, from the lacking of commas and sentence fragments to the empty sections. You asked me to be gentle, but I couldn't really help on this one.

Your opening paragraph, in particular, has bad sentence structure. Check for periods and commas, and whether or not you need them.

Images: 8 These are pretty much how I invision the admins. I'm curious to see how you'll do the next ones- I liked Mhallie's photo in particular. Try making a hybrid of a dog and a bird for Roman Dog Bird.
Miscellaneous: 7.5 Overall grade.
Final Score: 35.5 It isn't finished. Based on what's in it now, it has it's moments, but the empty sections are a major drag, and the quotes stacking on top of each other make it look like a mess. I suggest trimming a few Oscar Wildeisms, be a bit more in depth with the description for each Admin, and make a bit more space between the section headers. Obviously, this is a HUGE project, so I don't expect you to accomplish this overnight. If you're stuck, look at the admin you're writing about's contributions, and see what kind of articles they write and their comments-that should give you an idea of where to go. Good luck!
Reviewer: Saberwolf116 02:03, 16 April 2009 (UTC)
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