Right I'm stuck, I know I should go at this at different admins, however I want an admin only review, if you're not an admin. DO NOT REVIEW THIS!—The preceding signed comment was added byProjectmayhem666 (talk • contribs). 16:50, 4 March 2009 (UTC)
A few additions have been added and the help is appreciated, anyone can review this now. Remember this is a very big project and is not yet finished, so don't be too harsh. --—The preceding signed comment was added byProjectmayhem666 (talk • contribs). 11:52, 13 March 2009 (UTC)
Alright, since it's obviously not finished, I had to go on what I saw. But that didn't really matter, because what I saw what quite hilarous. You'd have to be around here a while to get any of these jokes, but they're nonetheless very good. My main pet peeve was all the quotes. Too many Oscar Wilde ones-try and fix that.
Ahh yes, the elusive concept. very rarely is there an article on Admins that doesn't contain sentences along the lines of "ROMAN DOG BIRD IS A STUPID NIGGER" or "MORDILLO IS A FILTHY JEW", and rarely do these authors stay on Uncyclopedia for more than a few days. Kudos for creating an article about admins that has real humor in it.
Prose and formatting:
Well...sorry, but it was terrible. There are many errors, from the lacking of commas and sentence fragments to the empty sections. You asked me to be gentle, but I couldn't really help on this one.
Your opening paragraph, in particular, has bad sentence structure. Check for periods and commas, and whether or not you need them.
These are pretty much how I invision the admins. I'm curious to see how you'll do the next ones- I liked Mhallie's photo in particular. Try making a hybrid of a dog and a bird for Roman Dog Bird.
It isn't finished. Based on what's in it now, it has it's moments, but the empty sections are a major drag, and the quotes stacking on top of each other make it look like a mess. I suggest trimming a few Oscar Wildeisms, be a bit more in depth with the description for each Admin, and make a bit more space between the section headers. Obviously, this is a HUGE project, so I don't expect you to accomplish this overnight. If you're stuck, look at the admin you're writing about's contributions, and see what kind of articles they write and their comments-that should give you an idea of where to go. Good luck!