Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/The House of Mouse (revised)

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The House of Mouse article has been revised and expanded based upon previous feedback. I would appreciate another review. Rbpolsen Come Rant · Come Look at all My Crap 23:54, 16 August 2009 (UTC)

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Humour: 5 Pretty good, but I feel like this kind of thing has been done before. Because of this, I'm not entirely sure what could be improved here to make it funnier. I'm a reviewer, not a miracle worker.
Concept: 6 While not an entirely original idea or concept, I think you've made a decent-enough article. It's kind of following an old idea of taking a children's show/book/toy and making it into a very 18+ topic. I'm not sure there's much more to be made of it.
Prose and formatting: 6 You've got distinct sections and good headings, but there are some formatting errors that you should probably take care of; for instance, you have several paragraphs that are far too short to be on their own. These should either be lengthened to at least five sentences or integrated into any nearby paragraph. There are also several red links that should be linked up to existing articles or removed altogether.
Images: 7 While three is a small amount of images for a relatively large article like this one, in this case I'd say it works just fine. The images complement the text well, and the captions support the images. I'm not saying that I wouldn't be against the addition of any new images (as long as they fit the article), it could very well survive as it is.
Miscellaneous: 7 Cool article bro.
Final Score: 31 A generic article. Well-written, and with some nice images, but it's still been done before.
Reviewer: There's no I in RAPE (lol contribs) 00:37 Aug 21, 2009
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