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Morning all. Let me know what you think. Unless you think it's shite. In which case I will eat your children.

Unholysmoke 09:09 17 Aug

Humour: 3.5 Some nice lines in there.
Concept: 6 I quite like the basic idea, but it really needs work.
Prose and formatting: 4 It's too listy. A list or two is fine, if you have a few paragraphs of solid prose to back it up. The emotional breakdown bit would work better as a paragraph with more explanation, for one.
Images: 7 I like the pie chart breakdown, that's good. The other one seems less relevant.
Miscellaneous: 6 Not sure it needs the British template, to be honest (and a vandal who made a stoopid edit certainly didn't).
Final Score: 26.5 Not shite (I'd be relieved for the safety of my kids, if I had any), but not great either. Could do with more fleshing out, and some descriptive prose. There's room for descriptions of the various types of fear in greater depth, maybe the history of the term (as our vandal noted, it crops up in Fear And Loathing), and so forth. Basically, it's not a bad start, but needs significant expansion. Go for it!
Reviewer: --Sir Under User (Hi, How Are You?) VFH KUN 12:21, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
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