it had to be done. I am sorry to all people who have ever been raped by a camel on their sojourn to mecca. I don't expect anything more than a 5. maybe a 6. --Mgr.SirSonic80☭ 17:46, 18 August 2008 (UTC)
Sorry it's just not funny, It reads like a bad Segal movie script and even they have more story in them. Some bits were mildly amusing (see content score) but overall it was more groan than grin.
I'm sorry, I tried to like this, I really did but it just wasn't funny. It had some elements that could be improved on, I like the idea of stealth camels particularly leaping out from concealment in sand dunes, but the premise of you going all badass on a camel trying to rape you just doesn't do it for me.
Prose and formatting:
It read a little like a fifth graders attempt to be all grown up and use big words, if you are actually a fifth grader then well done, you reached the mark, but if you aren't a fifth grader it needed much nicer grammar.
Can't complain about the images, right size, right place right content - it doesn't look like a particularly horny camel though.
Unless this is part of some ongoing joke and I've completely missed the point it just doesn't do it for me.
Apart from anything else it was just way too short, try fleshing it out and improving the story line. Lots of ideas about story and puns in the desert, misspellings for dessert and almost tripping over a trifle etc. plenty of possibility.