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edit Thank god I FINALLY found you!

Magic man 16:12, August 20, 2010 (UTC)

Humour: 6 There are some real funny parts in this article.
  • Thank God I finally found you! A good satire on how ridiculous the openings of these scam e-mails are. Its over the top of course but well done in the fact that people (and sadly there are some) would have to be really stupid to believe it. Nice making it so the user's name comes up.
  • How this situation came about This is pretty funny, a little racist but I suppose in a good way. The Geico bit is pretty funny and I love how its a analysis of why these certain scams are stupid and at the same time attempting to scam the poor user.
  • How to get your money This part is funny because it drives home how the scams are done, but at the same time it lacks the power due to its weak formatting, which I will get to.
  • P.S. A nice closer.
Concept: 7.5 Good idea, make an article about those African prince scams. Ignorant Americans of course never realize that Africa is a continent and not a country.
Prose and formatting: 2 Weakest part of this article. The main problem is you are writing it like a wikipedia article. Big mistake! You need to fix this so it reads like an e-mail/letter or even pop-up ad. Until you fix this the article is basically pointless. And not in the good way.
Images: 5 The ugly woman is great the other two pics arent creative enough when placed with the article. I know what you are going for, but you can do much better.
Miscellaneous: 3 Needs a lot of work. Fix how it is formatted add a little more flesh to the article.
Final Score: 23.5 Overall you have a good idea here that is poorly executed. This article until you re-format it not even worth a stab in the VFH section. This needs to be massively redone, but if you do it, it might end up becoming a pretty good article.
Reviewer: --Dr. Fenwick 17:23, August 20, 2010 (UTC)
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