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This is my firstest entry, but well, I'm ready.
Not under user but under review. So, smile.
I think I'll review (:I hate me new sig 08:16 August 6
- Awwww, thanks Zeliel. I was wondering if my humour sense is bad as my grammar, but hopefully its not really. I felt relieved since its the first time. I appreciate your review. P.S. I will come back with fully-upgraded outfit next time. Dah Dope Boyz'--User:DaDopeboy/sig 10:12, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
- Can I just say that one thing you definitely should not get rid of is that dialogue in the intro, that's a very nice touch. You can change the wording and setting to whatever you wish but the general concept is very funny, nice work--El Sid, the lazy one • parlez-vous franglais? 11:17, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
|Humour:||6.987||Generally - Good for a first article. You didn't use in-jokes and very focused throughout.
Opening - Good that you keep shortening the word as the article progresses. It displays/depicts how hard it is to pronounce - or write - the word. Oh, and the short part of the play should become more 18th century using words like "hast", "runneth", "thou" et cetera. You might want to use this for your "play". Maybe you can include those sources when you say "sources". Maybe something like "Obama has announced that the word "superblabla" is the predeccesor of super, superb...". Something like that, to sound more persuasive.
Origin - Don't write "Supercali//". write "Supercali-". // does not mean "oh, wait!" but it means stop the actionscript and allow comments to be written. In Adobe Flash CS3 I think. And please try to refine the article. It's pretty hard to understand it if your grammar is at such a level. I'll give you an example of a better paragraph.
Is that fine?
Wikipedia- The descriptions are good, but the grammmar. I beg you, please please edit the grammar. The speech by Sherman is not bad. Maybe you'd like to shift all the bad grammar to him, also showing how he couldn't possibly have constructed the word Supercaliblabla. Please remove the last sentence, or write in small letters. Never write that you're afraid of admins or they'll ban you -oops. sorry admins. I didn't mean it. I don't get it so just write it. Believe me.
Derivations - Don't say "because wikipedia says so". And never use "coz". Use an encyclopaedic tone. For example, "because my mother told me so". That's a far better excuse than Wikipedia (which you have just defamed :))
Extinction - Don't use caps, except for SPCL It's funny, I guarantee, but this is Wikipedia's brother. We use good and proper words, with only the right information. I recommend that you remove the "erm, what" sentence at the back, for it has outlived its usefulness, if it ever had any.
|Concept:||7.419||It's original, I guarantee you. It's long, but try not to talk too much on the derivatives. Either that, or lengthen the derivatives. They are too short and just not funny.|
|Prose and formatting:||2.89||It's very messy and has bad grammar. I would recommend you read the following links. Try to work on the grammar. Maybe you could ask me to proofread it for you. I will if you ask. But visit these links still:
And, you might want to remove the  and  references in the Wikipedia Quote, and you might also want to <sup>TEXT</sup> text to make it Superscript. Use that for "18th" or the references, if you really want them.
|Images:||2.49||One image, two vids. The only image is a picture of some user called JohnLennonlol posting SPCL. And its very small. Maybe you could take an image of an italian man, calling him Rufus.|
|Final Score:||24.686||You could improve this article, as long as you improve your grammar. But yeah, this is pretty good for a first. (Except for the bad grammar).|
|Reviewer:||I hate me new sig 10:02 August 6|