Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Steak & Blow Job Day

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edit Steak & Blow Job Day

Azarethroy 16:51, 25 February 2009 (UTC)

Outhouse   Tagstit   doesn't believe in new fancy-pancy toilet systems with running water and all. Just a hole in the ground with a lil' cover will do. Now gimme' your article and I'll be done in a few minutes.

While you are welcome to review this, I suggest you find another article in need of help so that we can clear the ever growing Pee Request list.

Humour: 4 Well first off, the concept is the only reason the humor is good, and after the concept, you don't really pursue it. That is why the humor is so low, despite the fact it was very funny. I feel you could have done so much more with it. There isn't really much to say here about humor, because there really isn't much. You have an amazing concept, but cut it short by length. So to really understand my issue with this, look under concept and prose.
Concept: 8 CLASSIC. I really haven't heard of this before and it MAY be something that is common and therefore, not original, but I haven't heard of it and it isn't on this site. It is absolutely hilarious and with a little work will hop right on the front page. As it is now, you don't develop it enough. You state what it is, say a bit of contreversy and your done. This could go SO many different ways. For example, you could talk about different variations of it for example a burger and a handjob day, a hot dog and anal day, and so on.

Another thing that you could expand on, is the topic itself. All you do his mention it. You should not only define it, but say what the men think of it what the girls think of it and so on. Really expand your directions with this. Make new sections bulk up your old ones and so on. This could really go place if you just put a bit more thought into it and just wrote it!

Prose and formatting: 4 There really wasn't any gramatical or spelling error. The formatting was decent overall. There were still a few problems though. First of all, get rid of the red links. Even one really screws everything up. It looks messy and throws off the feel. Replace it with a page that exists, or just text. I don't know why but red just always looks messy on these pages.

Second, this is WAY TOO SHORT. I know I have said it many times, but it is the glaring problem with this. This should at least be three times as long! There is SO much you could add to it (see concept). You could add more sections if you wanted, but before that, I suggest bulking up the ones you already have. Having one lined sections looks aweful. Even one paragraph looks pretty bad. You should make every section with at least two to three paragraphs in order to convey your ideas effectively, and neatly.

Images: 2 There was one, and it was EXTREMELY random. It didn't have anything to do with anything really. The caption made a weak connection but it was still very out there. Try adding in pictures a bit more relevant so the topic and putting in a better caption. Also, all good articles have about three to four pictures, so put some more in once you increase the length...which again...you MUST do.
Miscellaneous: 4.5 Averaged
Final Score: 22.5 Very funny, VFH potential for sure. Just increase the length and you will be in good shape. If you have any questions feel free to ask me on my talk page. Good luck!
Reviewer: ~SirTagstitVFHNotMPEEINGCPTRotMBFF 23:57, 25 February 2009 (UTC)

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