Rewrote this out of the ICU, helpful comments appreciated.--Striker2117 02:26, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
Very funny material here, and the humor is consistent. I didn't laugh out loud but I think that may have been the pacing. (Or I'm a cynical jerk who never laughs)
I like the concept. There at first seems to be some random humor sprinkled in, but it is kept consistent through the article and it is used to exaggerate the article's theme. Good job.
Prose and formatting:
Good prose and formatting. I personally have a short attention span, and my brain was trying to ignore further reading, but it was funny enough to keep me reading. Maybe if you could break up the longer parts a little bit?
I really like the images.
Needs a fart joke.
Great jarb! I like it much. I don't know what it was before, but I cannot see this article being anything but an improvement.
It'sMrthejazz... a case not yet solved. 22:07, April 22, 2010 (UTC)