Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Sideboob

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Hi. Please do not judge a book by its title or its cover (pictures), I'm happiest with the writing on this article. Had a great deal of fun with it. VFH is low right now, so if you have any clout with the cabal, help out an old altar boy (not really, a line from 'The Exorcist').

Thanks mucho.

Aleister in Chains

Can you suggest a good psychologist for me, I just hurt my old one real bad. Anyway, Sideboob awaits in your future! Thanks someone. Al en chains 00:16 29 3 mmx
I'll try this one. —Paizuri MUN (Talk Contribs Poll!) 04:37, 1 April 2010 (UTC)
Humour: 8 This is my first pee review, so forgive me if it's not very good. I thought this was overall pretty entertaining to read. I'll try to break it down section by section.

Intro

You have a good intro; it does a good job of introducing the subject while keeping the reader wanting to read more on the topic. I don't really have any complaints here.

History of Sideboob

This is where it got a bit weak, in my opinion. I thought the concept of it being invented by cavemen was a bit cliched, though you played on it nicely when you got into the second paragraph. I like how you talked about the cavemen as they were just discovering the joys of the female body (heh), though I'd take out the "cave slut" reference. In the last two paragraphs, I would be a bit less descriptive, but overall they were fine.

The Great Sideboob Debate

This is my favorite section in the article; I like the dry, serious humor in this section as the two debated over what qualified as sideboob. Not much to improve on here.

The Future of Sideboob

This was pretty good, though you kinda lose the encyclopedic voice a little. The only suggestion I have would be here; when you quote, "although the psychics "see" its demise, pointing to an ancient statement containing mumbo-jumbo found carved into the base of an Aztec sundial or bird sculpture or something silly like that," I would change it to something more encyclopedic, so it doesn't sound as blatant. I can't really think of a good example, but I'm sure you can think of something.

Concept: 7.5 To be honest, I've never thought of "sideboob" as a possible topic for an article, though you've certainly proven me wrong there. I do like the concept though; you've definitely written it out as though it's a notable subject.
Prose and formatting: 8.5 Your writing is very good, and it kept me entertained throughout. I didn't pick up on any speeling erorrs, though I might have missed something along the way. Otherwise, it's great.
Images: 7.5 I'm going to let my reproductive organ speak for me here and say that I fully approve of all the pictures containing boobage. But seriously, the pictures are, admittedly, all sideboobs, and they fit in well with the article; except for that second to last one. I'm not quite sure why you put that preggo picture at the end, but that's really my only complaint.
Miscellaneous: 7.5 My overall grade of the article.
Final Score: 39 This could very well be feature-worthy. I hope my first review was helpful in any way, even if I was just building on your ego a bit.
Reviewer: Paizuri MUN (Talk Contribs Poll!) 07:24, 1 April 2010 (UTC)
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