I didn't really laugh at all during reading this. I think that's because a little too crazy and random. I think that if it had a little more of a plot to it, it would be funnier. I also think that you went too fast. I felt like I was riding a roller coaster while reading it. Maybe to make it more humorous, you could come up with one big story plot, like the wedding, and add little semi-random details, but ones that still make a little sense. I also think that you're trying too hard to be violent and funny, which just makes it dumb.
Concept:
1
There is absolutely no concept to this at all. It's just crazy sounding sentences mashed up into one crazy page.
Prose and formatting:
2
I don't even know.
Images:
1
A rose and very fake looking blood. Really? And that rose kinda looks like a tulip lol.
Miscellaneous:
10
Completely crazy! And this can be in a good way too, I just think that you over-did the crazy.
Final Score:
17
I think that this is a very hard article to write, especially because roses aren't that funny, but I like some of your ideas.
11:25, 12 May, 2011 (UTC)
