It's a Re-write.
Cadarado425 13:40, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
Dude, post the link in, not the whole article! OK, I fixed that, now wait for a friendly soul to review it for you. --SirU.U.Esq.VFH | GUN | Natter | Uh oh | Pee 14:07, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
Wow, It's crass. That's really all that can be said for it. Hookers aren;t funny, and neither are your other disgusting bodily refernces.
star wars stuff is incredibly overdone. perhaps you could pick up an original subject for your next piece?
Prose and formatting:
Your spelling and grammar needs work, perhaps you could try writing the article in a word processing program to help with that.
There were plenty of images, and while they all dealt with star wars, none of them, or their comments, were especially hilarious.
the price list thing was unfunny, and long. perhaps consider dropping it to streamline your article.
It could use quite a bit of work, and the topic is so overdone that I would advise you to get a new topic, and start over from scratch. I'm sure you'd do better if you were using more original humor, and not just the same old stuff you usually see on uncyclopedia.