Oh noes, the FCC just created an article relating to their censorship!!--Dark Paladin X 02:38, 10 May 2008 (UTC)
A lot of it seems too random, I think what you should do is make it closer to the truth but more satirical. If it gets too far fetched it just seems ridiculous.
I dunno, it's kinda ... random. Again. But mainly because Pokemon hasn't been controversial in a good 10 years.
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You have a few very long sentences that could be broken up and the occasional odd spelling typo, but not too bad. But OH MY GOD LAY OFF THE CENSORING. Please. It's funniest in small doses, and you used enough to kill Marilyn Monroe AND three horses.
Some pictures are pretty funny, like the first one. But the one with the flashing lights hurts, and there are some which I think don't contribute much.
Like I said, lay off the censoring and the completely random jokes.
I think if you make it less random, get rid of most of the censoring and a couple pics, maybe make it a little shorter and have it tie into the present day, make it closer to the truth, and you'll have yourself a pretty good article.
Well, the jokes I placed in the article wasn't meant to be random, it suppose to satiricalize WHY the episodes were banned (which there is truth around). For example, the one with Jynx Pokemon was banned due to racism on blacks, so I placed a few references of the N-word. Also, the reaction part is supposed be the fan reaction to all the censorship done by the FCC. And all the censorship part. Well, you know, they after all ARE the FCC. Pokemon is controversial (even today), check the wikipedia article, even the pokemon wiki, bulbapedia mentions the controversy.--Dark Paladin X 03:49, 2 June 2008 (UTC)
I think the idea of controversial Pokemon content has been used many times, so this article doesn't seem very funny or original
ditto. same as above comments.
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I think the idea of the article is great, but there needs to be more attention on spelling.
The images in this article are pretty funny. I think their placement in the article goes well with their sections.
not much to say
Finally, i find this article funny overall, but to long and somewhat unoriginal.