Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Pete Chaff
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I'm a bit tired now. Geoffprickett 17:26, 25 September 2008 (UTC)
PEE REVIEW IN PROGRESS
of giving you his opinion and pretending you care.
|Humour:||2.75||Hey, Geoff. Let's have a look... see what've got.
|Concept:||1||This article doesn't satirize anything. The concept seems to be "Let's make up a guy, and say random and zany things about him for a while." Well, that's really easy to do, and the result is almost never any good. Here, let me show you: "Norman G. Milf was a railroad conductor. Born in 1832, he was renowned for rarely getting lost and drinking a great deal of wine. An avid billiards player, Milf was often mocked for his shiny bald head." Funny? No... no, not really.
I hate to say it, but I don't think this article is salvageable. I think it would be best to take the few successful jokes in here - the name of the hit song, and the name of the final album - and see if they can fit into something that is an actual satire of something that exists.
|Prose and formatting:||7||The prose and formatting are fine.|
|Images:||2||This is the kind of image that often accompanies these kinds of articles: find a picture of a morbidly obese, or insanely ugly, or very stupid-looking (or all three) man or woman, and associate it with the subject. It really doesn't work.|
|Final Score:||14.75||I'm sorry for the harsh review. I don't mean to be discouraging, but I really, really don't think this article can be salvaged. I'd consider moving the few funny lines into (The Farmer's Wife's Got A Four Inch Crack In Her, But She Ain't) Broken and requesting that this one be deleted. Because this doesn't add to that article. It doesn't enhance its humor by fleshing out the universe it takes place in. It actually dulls its humor by making that universe seem, you know, pretty much like this one, only zany.
Best of luck!
|Reviewer:||22:52, 30 October 2008 (UTC)|
Well, if ya know who the Wurzels are, and especially if you come from the West Country on England, there are a few rather funny lines in here. It obviously does not work for Americans though. They will never understand humour. MrN 10:08, Nov 22