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This is one of my earliest articles, and I would prefer to know where I could improve in writing. Please Review. --MaxPayne 19:34, 6 April 2009 (UTC)

MaxPayne 19:34, 6 April 2009 (UTC)

Humour: 7 Introduction - Not funny. See my Concept Introduction for more info.

Histroy of Permaban - Good idea. Maybe just add things about more people permabanning more things. You have to add Benson. Maybe you can add something way back (stone age?!)

Modern Permabanning - Extend this... Maybe you can talk about the future. Some new-fangled thing being permabanned in the near future or something.

If you have been permabanned - Remove the "See article". It makes it look horrible. Maybe add something like hitting yourself with a baseball-bat seven or eight times (its a featured article). Search it.

The Rest - Gr8. Hope you don't get permabanned.

See also - don't link to the Beginner's guide. To make it look nicer, put the banhammer at the top.

Concept: 6 Introduction-I don't think you should have options. Just be direct and say something like If you're permabanned, this is just for you!. My intros are lousy but you can adopt them or something.

Rest of Article - Like the history :) Maybe for the modern permabanning, you can say something like Permabanning has become the American Way of life. "If you have been permabanned" is great.

Generally, - I'd say the concept is not bad. Though you need Benson in there.

Prose and formatting: 9.44444 I'd like to give you ten, but I swore not to ever do that.
Images: 7 Images - Good, but more "PERMABANNED" pictures are welcome. (Those which have the words permabanned in red.) Maybe something about Benson permabanned?

Generally, - Good. Highest I've ever rated :)

Miscellaneous: 6 That's around the total.
Final Score: 35.44444 Highest Pee Review I've rated.
Reviewer: The la Zhel 12:55, 21 April 2009 (UTC)
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