Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Peak Oil

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edit Peak Oil

I just revamped the ...piss out this article. Let me know what it could use. Also, suggestions for pictures would be great. This is my second article, the first being Joseph Stalin's Secret Jamaican Boy's Fight Club Choir. However, this article wasn't original, it was a revamp. -- 22:34, 13 August 2007 (UTC)

Humour: 3 it seems like you've copied and pasted actual news clippings, and then poked fun at them in the paragraph after. you need to integrate!
Concept: 5 not a bad concept, it has some potential.
Prose and formatting: 2.5 divided correctly, but...you have no links! you need to add links, like this one, throughout your article. without links, no one will find your page! links are the arteries that carry uncyclopedia's forest-green zombie blood.
Images: 1.5 the one image contributes no humor. i think a chart/graph would be nice, something like 'oil demand vs. how totally fucked we are'.
Miscellaneous: 4 it doesn't really feel like a proper uncyclopedia article.
Final Score: 16 you've got some potential here. i have some advice for you (though i wonder if it will even be read, as you are a redlinked IP address). i will dispense this advice...

..now. 1) register as a user. it's easy, free, fast, it makes you cool, you get a fancy template for you brand-new user page, and people take you seriously. 2) click the 'featured content' link to your left. read some really great articles, and see how humor woven flawlessly into fact is superior to alternating between truth and nonsense. also see how links can be used, both directly (like this: Kitchen sink) and indirectly (like this: pointless.) 3) come back and spend some time on your article. with a little love, you can turn it into a solid piece.

Reviewer: --SirGerrycheeversGunTalk 16:24, 22 August 2007 (UTC)
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