Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/PETA

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Thanks for your review! I'll think about what you said. I'll be gone this weekend but will come back Monday! Miley Spears 16:35, 15 August 2009 (UTC)

Miley Spears 02:47, 14 August 2009 (UTC)

Humour: 7 This article has a good basis, but needs a bit of direction. It starts off quite funny but kind of trails off and becomes to random. Don't be afraid to delete random stuff. It often makes your article better. Also see [In Jokes] as towards the end you seem to include most of them. Try to avoid this as they are so overused it is like saying Hitler was a slightly grumpy man with frequent bowel problems."
Concept: 7.5 "The concept is great, it is written like it contains some factual information. As I said the choclate cake is there, but your icing has a few lumps in it. If that makes sense. Your Petaphiles list was particularly creative. Use that creativity on some of the other parts of the article like the Carnivores Alliance section. (Is Zphd Btlbrw a reference to Zaphod Bettlebrox from Hitchhikers Guide to the Galaxy?)
Prose and formatting: 8.5 "Very nicely formatted, with great grammer. There are few things that you can fix here. Perhaps italicise your quotes and remove the red-links. They detract from the overall humor of the article. This article might work a little better if it was written with a more serious encyclopaedia-like tone. To catch the few errors here try reading the article out loud to yourself or a family member. That is a fantastic way to find grammatical errors.
Images: 7 "These pictures suited the article quite nicely. Perhaps just some improvement on the captions rather than the images themselves. I particulary like the Governing Board picture. Perhaps for the picture of Pluto include a goatse reference along with an animal cruelty reference. Something like Pluto performing repeated goatse for the pleasure of the League of Meateaters. Use your imagination."
Miscellaneous: 7.5 "Just averaged your score out"
Final Score: 37.5 "A really good start to the article. It is obvious you have given this topic a lot of thought. I love your style and originality of topic. Feel free to contact me via my talk page for questions, problems or queries. A very good effort."
Reviewer: JamesM123 15:46, 15 August 2009 (UTC)
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