Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Old man ranting

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edit Old man ranting

HungryHippo1492 08:29, 17 August 2009 (UTC)

Okay I'm going to review.                zh              09:06 August 17

I think I'm not. No time.                zh              09:13 August 17
I got this. There's no I in RAPE (lol contribs) 05:34 Aug 20, 2009

Oh, please. Ze spy is backstabbing reviewing this article.

Humour: 5 It was kind of funny at some parts, but I mainly just found it to be random jokes that weren't really relevant to the topic. You may wish to read the HTBFANJS guide before revising.
Concept: 8 I won't lie, this is a very good idea. I think this topic has a lot of potential. Right now it needs work, but I'm certain this could become a great article.
Prose and formatting: 3 Could use some improvement here. The first section, which should usually only be a small introduction, was over two large paragraphs long. I'd suggest splitting this up into an introduction and then two following sections. Also, you should probably find some way to integrate the final section into the third paragraph. Right now, it just sort of peters off at the end. Finally, there are grammar, spelling, and capitalization mistakes in a great abundance that need to be dealt with.
Images: 4 Although the first image was both funny and relevant to the topic, it kind of went downhill from there. I'd suggest either editing the images you've got to allow them to support the text more, or change the captions to make them funnier.
Miscellaneous: 4 Spelling and grammar errors are one of the biggest turnoff for me when I'm deciding whether an article is good or not. Even a hilarious piece of work won't get anywhere if you don't spellcheck it.
Final Score: 24 I believe this article has a lot of potential, but it'll need a significant amount of work. I'm also going to tag this in the ICU so it can get some help from any volunteers.
Reviewer: There's no I in RAPE (lol contribs) 06:34 Aug 20, 2009
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