I wrote this following up on a funny thought I had about the Nintendo DSi. It feels a little bare-bones to me, though, so I would like a review and some suggestions for expansion.
--Aethix ~ Talk|Contributions|My project 20:25, 12 April 2009 (UTC)
Finally! Not a sexist article (you guys have a hand at that...) Mind you though, there might be more features, of which you don't yet exploit the humorous potential.
I'm seeing some potential. Even though it will never be a featured article in the form you're doing it, it'll be fun to read.
Prose and formatting:
Try fluffing up the letter about the major threat. Try font type Forte, I always use it for handwritten stuff.
The "Big Bros. is watching you" should be before or instead the DSi picture. Make the DSi look evil!
A nice read. It actually gave me some info I didn't know at first! The DSiWare seemed to be random.
Maybe, this is not the right writing style. make it more like the Sony director's letter. Go wicked, go insane, go dsWOW!