I wrote this following up on a funny thought I had about the Nintendo DSi. It feels a little bare-bones to me, though, so I would like a review and some suggestions for expansion.
--Aethix ~ Talk|Contributions|My project 20:25, 12 April 2009 (UTC)
Humour:
7
Finally! Not a sexist article (you guys have a hand at that...) Mind you though, there might be more features, of which you don't yet exploit the humorous potential.
Concept:
8
I'm seeing some potential. Even though it will never be a featured article in the form you're doing it, it'll be fun to read.
Prose and formatting:
6
Try fluffing up the letter about the major threat. Try font type Forte, I always use it for handwritten stuff.
Images:
4
The "Big Bros. is watching you" should be before or instead the DSi picture. Make the DSi look evil!
Miscellaneous:
6.3
A nice read. It actually gave me some info I didn't know at first! The DSiWare seemed to be random.
Final Score:
31.3
Maybe, this is not the right writing style. make it more like the Sony director's letter. Go wicked, go insane, go dsWOW!
Aethix ~ Talk|Contributions|My project 
