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I wrote this following up on a funny thought I had about the Nintendo DSi. It feels a little bare-bones to me, though, so I would like a review and some suggestions for expansion. --Kirbywave2 Aethix ~ Talk|Contributions|My project Kirbywave2 20:25, 12 April 2009 (UTC)

Humour: 7 Finally! Not a sexist article (you guys have a hand at that...) Mind you though, there might be more features, of which you don't yet exploit the humorous potential.
Concept: 8 I'm seeing some potential. Even though it will never be a featured article in the form you're doing it, it'll be fun to read.
Prose and formatting: 6 Try fluffing up the letter about the major threat. Try font type Forte, I always use it for handwritten stuff.
Images: 4 The "Big Bros. is watching you" should be before or instead the DSi picture. Make the DSi look evil!
Miscellaneous: 6.3 A nice read. It actually gave me some info I didn't know at first! The DSiWare seemed to be random.
Final Score: 31.3 Maybe, this is not the right writing style. make it more like the Sony director's letter. Go wicked, go insane, go dsWOW!
Reviewer: Lars863 18:42, 14 April 2009 (UTC)


Good luck improving on your article.

P.S.
I'm Dutch, so my opinion may differ through culture. Ask a Yankee, too or a Teasipper.

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