Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Nazi Burger (Revised)

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edit Nazi Burger

I pee reviewed this article, liked the concept, and then expanded and fixed some parts. I'm not very good at writing funny stuff, so I'd like to know what parts should be rewritten and how the article can generally be improved to make it funnier. Parsat, or, A Whole Bunch of Mischief 00:40, 13 February 2008 (UTC)

Humour: 8 Very funny and it seems that the article was written based on facts. Consistency is present here. However, I would doubt if it would not be funny for those who do not review their world history.
Concept: 7 Having an article named "Nazi Burger" is intriguing at start. It can be improved if "How to's" will be provided like how is it made and prepared. You can even put there how does customers raise their hands if they want to get the attention of a waiter. I also suggest that the Mein Kampf be a cook book instead. I like how "Nazi" and food concepts are blended here, but I don't know if the "Nazi Burger" is realistic! :P
Prose and formatting: 10 It is written in encyclopedia format. Brief and concise. For this text "However, it was forced off the market in 1945 and now only exists outside Germany as Neo-Nazi Burger", I suggest putting "also known as McDonald's" after so that the reader will be more intrigued.
Images: 7 There are three images present in this article. The two pictures are funny and related to the concept which is "Nazi Burger" but I don't get the picture with a description "Another satisfied customer".
Miscellaneous: 7.3 Averaged
Final Score: 39.3 A good article overall. It can be improved by adding more facts there. Congratulations!
Reviewer: --Kapuso 17:39, 2 March 2008 (UTC)
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