Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Movie Of Lady Who's Ankle Is Showing
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Re-did a lot of the stuff, looking for some more opinions.
--The Truth of Matheus 03:47, 1 June 2008 (UTC)
|Humour:||3||Really not that funny. The gag about Shatner being Jewish wasn't amusing, and you repeat it four times. The joke name for the Paris Hilton character could have been written by a twelve year old. The random humour adds nothing. The crossed out writing gag made no sense, because there are two separate stories, only one of which would be sensible to suppress, and if it were true the rest of the article would make no sense.
The scripts are just awful. The gags about celebrities are not developed at all; it's just namedropping without jokes attached.
|Concept:||2||The idea of the sight of a woman's ankle being pornographic makes some sense if the movie was made pre-World War One. Having it remade now just makes it stupid.|
|Prose and formatting:||3||Well, for a start it's Woman Whose Ankle is Showing. The prose is stilted and awkward, and there's a red link to itself! The formatting is badly organised, and the entire confused mess looks as horrible as it reads.
I also noticed that it had a Featured Article template. I see that you did not add it, but you did edit it. Please note that the Featured Article template should never be added to an article that has not been featured, and if present should not be tampered with. Seriously.
|Images:||2||Other than the poster, none of the images are relevant, and none of them are funny.|
|Final Score:||12.5||I usually try to say something positive about an article, but is just rubbish. I know that you didn't much of it, but frankly you didn't do much to fix it up either. What can you do to fix it? My money's on either a) nothing, b) put it on VFD, or c) complete rewrite, and I mean complete scorched-earth spare nothing start from scratch. I would recommend option b, as I believe this article to be irredeemably bad.|
|Reviewer:||--Cap'n Sir Ben GUN WotM VFH VFP 05:43, 1 June 2008 (UTC)|