Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Mouse Trap

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I felt this article was worthy of conversion from Illogicopedia to Uncyclopedia... do you? --MrMetalFLower 16:54, 23 August 2007 (UTC)

Humour: 3 this would be an example of 'random humor run amok'.we don't take too kindly to these types of articles here at uncyclopedia.
Concept: 7.5 this is a good idea (when you reach waaaaaaaay down), and there definitely should be an uncyc article on it.
Prose and formatting: 0.2 this article reads like it was poorly translated from sanskrit, or like a mad lib filled in by someone on crack. if the reader is trying to make sense of your writing, they have no time to laugh (or for their other hobbies, such as FrisbeeTM.) you have no links, you need to link to other articles (like this).
Images: 2 these images have nearly nothing to contribute to the article and they're not very funny.
Miscellaneous: 3.2 i did some research, and it turns out this article is taken directly from illogicopedia. at uncyc, we pride ourselves on witty, biting sarcasm rather than inane randomness.
Final Score: 15.9 this article needs lots of work. however, i wouldn't even bother to give it a pee review if i didnt think it had some potential. you've got a good concept, you just need to strip this article down (all the way down, don't be shy) and build it back up. focus on the game itself; don't wander. throw in some more images; even something as simple as a pic of the game board with a witty caption can work. you can turn this into a decent article with lots (and lots and lots) of love, but do it quick before some bloodthirsty admin comes along and bludgeons it to death with a hammer.
Reviewer: --SirGerrycheeversGunTalk 18:10, 23 August 2007 (UTC)
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