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edit Michael Holding

I'd like to have it reviewed. It's been on the VFH but failed as some fucking Poles from hated Polish Nonsensopedia came here voting for, admitting they are the Poles and knowing that I will have troubles due to that. Polisz Sir Ptok-BentonicznyPisz tutaj KUN 18:19, December 24, 2009 (UTC)

No one seems to be doing these, so I'll have this one done tomorrow. 48 hours max. --Matfen 23:47, January 9, 2010 (UTC)
Sorry I took so long. I'll start now. --Matfen 18:16, January 10, 2010 (UTC)


Prose Concept Humour Images Misc Score Summary

edit Reviewer details:

A little bit about the reviewer before we start.

An Angol who parodoxically knows jack shit about cricket.

edit Prose and Formatting:

How good does it look and how well does it read? 7.5

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Writing style

I'm sure you are quite aware of my view on this article's grammar, seeing as we met when I dissed your syntax. It's okay, but the tone isn't really that uncyclopedic at times. For example, stating that "Jamaicans are far too lazy to run marathons" is a bit biased, stating that "Jamaicans are reknowned for being far too lazy to run marathons" is much more subtle and consistent with the tone of an article.

The wordings could be clearer as well. I understand part of this is my fault, as I gave it a good proofread while it was last on VFH, but the problem is that I have no f***ing clue what all this cricket terminology means. So I'm not entirely sure whether what I'm supposed to be reading is either grammatically wrong, or is just confusing to the average non-cricket enthusiast. What I did notice though, was the constant changes in tense. If you're going to detail one of his strategies, at least keep it all in the same tense so I can follow it easier.

Also, I noticed you do some of these cutaway gags where the narrator does a self-correction on himself. That would contrast and work more if the article was more intellectual. As well, the sentence after these cutaways doesn't seem to correspond with what he was originally going to say.

Spelling

I don't know how I missed this one. On the first quote, for some reason whispering is spelled "Whisphering".

Grammar

I think I already covered grammar in the writing style section.

Layout

It's okay, I guess.

Overall appearance

Tone tightening and proofreading is probably needed.

edit Concept

How good an idea is behind the article? 8

I hate cricket with a vengeance, but I found some of his strategies quite amusing and accessible. Penis touching is a universally accepted form of comedy.

edit Humour

How funny is it? Why is it funny? How can it be funnier? 6

There are probably a lot of cricket jokes in this article that rip on Holding, and his fans and haters may enjoy it. However, the distracting grammar and syntax may take away the punchline of some of the jokes. I remember when I first read the article, I had to re-read some sections over three times just to make sense of what was going on.

edit Images

How are the images? Are they relevant, with good quality and formatting? 6

They're relevant, and the holding company is a clever pun, but they didn't make me as an outsider laugh out loud. Then again, I'm not sure what would with this guy.

edit Miscellaneous

The article's overall quality - that indefinable something. 6.9

Averaged. You should also know that a lot of users may bawl like a baby at the small script in the article as it's not consistent with the rest of the format. I couldn't care less though, to be honest.

edit Final score

Prose
7.5
Concept
8
Humour
6
Images
6
Misc
6.9
Final Score
34.4

edit Summary

An overall summation of the article.

I know this pee review doesn't matter that much, as you are probably just looking to get this article featured legally as it is, without any fellow Polish brothers getting the nomination invalidated. Whatever. I'd probably vote for depending on how the tide is turning. Otherwise, I think I'll be abstaining.

This was a PEE review by --Matfen 18:16, January 10, 2010 (UTC)
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