Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Mario's Head

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edit Mario's Head

99.123.131.219 20:08, June 28, 2011 (UTC)

I may regret this, but okay--Iwillkillyou 333 TALK What's it like to be a heretic? 17:57, July 12, 2011 (UTC)
I like to write a lot of things, I’m pretty good at Pee Reviews, and I received an award Author of the Month Award and two features. Also I like Avenged Sevenfold, Modern Warfare 2, Halo 3, and brunettes and emo girls.
Concept: 1 Just as I expected, a article about Mario in some weird fashion. This time though, it's his head. I have to admit I'm impress by people's creativity. It's too bad they have to use that creativity to create nonsense like this. Pretty much its about the adventures of Mario's head going around and being annoying as well as causing evil and being tortured by players. It also talks about him creating a game that involves typing, yet he's a head. And it talk about him destroying a kingdom, and eventually dies in the end. The only part that I like about this article is the mentioning of Zelda being sexy, which I would agree with.

Now articles with a similar concept (a part of somebody's body) could work, like this article. The only exception is that article is could and was featured, while this one is not so good and far from a feature.

Prose and Formatting: 4 Suprisingly, the article is good on spelling. I expected noob typing in it, but guess I was wrong. But the reason why the grade is a four is do to two things. First, there is a good amount of red links in the article, and I very much despise red links. Secondly, the tone is very nobbish and immature, going from first person to third person constantly. Otherwise, grmar and spelling is fine.
Humo(u)r: 1 The humor relies on mainly randomness, fictional stories (as in event both in real life and fiction that never happened) and the original "make the character look stupid and unliked" theme, which is hardly a humor maker. It also makes references to Mama Luigi, which I also find unfunny, and asplode. And the article is full of cruft and possibly violates like 50% of HTBFANJS.
Images: 1 There was one, and to tell the truth, I'm not of fan of that image. It justs creepy and ugly, and the caption doesn't help either.
Miscellaneous: 1.8 My overall grade of this article.
Final Score: 8.8 If I was a noobish reviewer, I would put zero on everything score and just say "this sucksdick". But I'm not, so this is more professional. Plus, I want to get a bigger number of indepth reviews and to lower the number of articles waiting on pee review. So in conclusion, I suggest two options, 1)scratch this article and make it none-existent, or 2) start from scratch and completely rewrite this article. Feel free to visit my talk pagefor any reason. Cheers!
Reviewer: --Iwillkillyou 333 TALK What's it like to be a heretic? 19:07, July 12, 2011 (UTC)
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