Captain Nerd 15:39, 30 April 2009 (UTC)
This article is my FIRST article and I wish for someone to tell me what they think of it.
Hey Captain Nerd, thanks for joining Uncyclopedia. Now, this is your first article, so it's obviously not VFH. Here are a few problems with this article: first, it's short. It seems somewhat like a dictionary definition. Second, you fall into several cliches while writing this. As stated in HTBFANJS, bashing Wikipedia is older than dirt, and is more annoying than funny. Also, strive to avoid Captain Understandment, Obvious, Oblivious, and Sarcasm. My recommendation: open two tabs, one with your article in it, one with HTBFANJS in it. Scan your article for jokes that are mentioned in the "avoid stagnant jokes" section of HTBFANJS- chances are, if you use cliches, it's unfunny.
Creating generic articles with self-explanatory titles (such as Bad article and Long article) is something that has been done many times, and has grown on Uncyclopedians. Also, it's somewhat decieving to have an article with the title "Longest Article" if it's a stub.
Prose and formatting:
There are two reasons why this article does not look good: first, it's a stub. Now, there's nothing wrong with having a stub (usually), but you need to give it a satisfying, roundabout conclusion- this article's ending sounds like you ran out of things to put there, so you just stopped. Second, you have numerous spelling and punctuation errors.
One image is never enough. And the one image you do have is kind of a non-sequitir. What does the popularity of Jesus have to do with the longest article? You should probably look for something along the lines of a very, very long object/person, and go from there.
My overall grade of the article.
Basically, you've got a misleading title, to many cliches in your humor, and too many links to self explanatory titles. Your article is in critical condition, but it's much to young to go on VFD. Here are a few things you can do to improve it: first, remove all references and jokes relating to anything that falls under this category. Second, copy and paste your article to Microsoft Word (or whatever you have on your comp). Look for typing errors, and correct them. Finally, simply expand. It's not so bad- it just needs a lot of attention and work. Keep at it! =)