Enjoy. My first full work.--DJ Irreverent 15:42, 14 January 2008 (UTC)
I thought that was funny, especially the last parts, but maybe try to go to the how to be funny page and read it over a few times, I had to do that when I wrote the article about Neodymium, which has yet to be reviewed. This article could go far, even to the front page, if you work on it just a little more.
The concept is a bit esoteric(not known by too many people), but it was a good one nonetheless, it has originality. A couple things that you could do are to expand the article and write it as well as you possibly can.
Prose and formatting:
The formatting is awesome, don't change it, unless funniness demands the format be changed to accommodate it.
More images should be added, there are only a couple images which is ok, but not great. So if you perhaps get some more pictures, or photoshop some relevant pictures to make them even more relevant, that would make your article better. But the ones that are already there are great.
8.4 average score
It can be improved by working on it a bit more but overall it is still pretty good, even for a first full work