Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Latios and Latias
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This is the first hilarious article. Let's hope it's in for VFH. Rate it good, or the Pokemonists will kill and eat you!
|Humour:||7.5||Quite good for a first timer. Good idea but it could be a little more fleshed out. The reference to Jesus's exile and how you wove that around Latios was very funny. Could I suggest a section on the supposed incest between Latios and Latias perhaps. That is if it is not to over the top.|
|Concept:||8||Very good concept use. I really enjoyed reading about Latios's exile and how Latias had kids with Ash. You might want to make mention of some of the other Pokemon characters. Like how Jessie got her red hair from red Latias (hint hint). Other that that it is a very original idea.|
|Prose and formatting:||7||The use of the encyclopedic voice in the Latios section is very effective then switching to the slightly panicked voice with the Ash/Latias thing was very effective. I love how it gets more and more desparate throughout the page until you get eaten by some mysterious thing.|
|Images:||8||Very nicely done picture of Latios at the Last Supper. Also nice annotation of the Latais/Ash picture. Thank you for censoring it. I don't know if eveyone's heart could stand it.|
|Miscellaneous:||7.6||Just averaged out the other scores|
|Final Score:||38.1||I am really looking foward to seeing some of your other work. Well done on a first try|
|Reviewer:||JamesM123 11:51, 22 November 2008 (UTC)|
Second opinion: I really don't agree with this - the article needs work, and I suspect it'll get shot down on VFH fairly quickly. A few points:
- It's ugly - too many templates, overuse of the censorship tag, too many quotes and redlinks.
- It's kinda random and memey. Have another look at HTBFANJS - there's too much stuff here that doesn't make sense.
- It badly needs a proofread. There aren't too many typos, it's true, but there are a lot of clumsy, hard to read sentences.
I think you got a very generous score there - as a rule of thumb, take reviews by someone relatively new to the site with a pinch of salt, and maybe ask an experienced editor for very quick opinion, to balance things up - they're more likely to have an idea of what will play well on VFH. This, as I say, needs plenty of work. However, I commend your enthusiasm, and wish you luck with it! --UU - natter 11:24, Nov 24