Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Ku Klux Klan (rewrite)

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This is what would have been my Turkey Day Ball entry for Best Bad Taste Article if final exams and final papers and the holidays and shopping and spending time with my friends/family/girlfriend didn't get in the way. Luckily, I'm through with all that shit and back to regularly writing here. Hurray! —Unführer Guildy Ritter von Guildensternenstein 20:11, December 29, 2009 (UTC)

Also, experienced reviewer, please. —Unführer Guildy Ritter von Guildensternenstein 20:17, December 29, 2009 (UTC)
Humour: 6 It's interesting. You sort of mix parody and sarcasm here awkwardly. My first impression was that you were going to take a route in which you totally mischaracterize the KKK to make them appear the exact opposite of what they are and were historically (Personally that's the direction I would have taken the article). From there you mix in between actually describing what they do and going back to the mischaracterization approach. I think it would better serve your article to stick to one approach so you don't catch the reader too off-guard or confuse them (if they're retarded). The section on lynching wasn't terribly funny either. It's not that I think that a section on lynching isn't appropriate or anything or that it couldn't be funny, it's just that the way you went about is more shocking than humorous. That's in all honesty; I'd either re-do that section or simply ignore it.
Concept: 9 What's Uncyclopedia without an article on the KKK?
Prose and formatting: 8 For the most part you do a good job with parodying wikipedia, my only suggestion would be to add more to the article (it's pretty short right now) and to link more uncyclopedia pages within your text.
Images: 6 You're missing a caption on the main picture. I feel if you're going to use a logo as your first picture you should make an infobox to go along with it. You're missing a caption on your second picture too. without a caption, it doesn't tie into the text as well. The costume party and cross-burning pictures (and captions) are spot on. The lynching picture and caption are too much, the realism of the picture does not mix well with the particular appraoch you chose for that section, as I touched on earlier.
Miscellaneous: 6
Final Score: 35 Again, I think this could be good if you lengthen the article and choose one specific approach to your humor. A little bit of clean-up is in order too, but all in all you have a good start. If I had randomly stumbled onto this page, however, I would not have been overly impressed or enticed to read. A little extra editing can fix that though :) Something I don't think I mentioned about the infobox earlier is that it makes people interested in the article, trust me.
Reviewer: Skinfan13 09:55, January 3, 2010 (UTC)
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