Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Kim Jong Un's House of Party and All Night Buffet
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I found this article currently ICU'd </font>- but I think it has some potential. Please don't delete it until the Pee Review gets done. Thanks!
- OK, I'll review this. This is a Quick Pee Review though. Also, join GUACP and we can clean this article up. |Si Plebius Dato' (Sir) Joe ang Kyurem CUN|IC Kill | 12:45, April 14, 2012 (UTC)
|Humour:||3||The entire article is unfunny. There are no jokes, punchlines or anything that stands out from the rest. The writer knows what funny is, and should read HTBFANJS. Also, the writer is just only new, so I recommend this to such people. The names are ridiculously long, especially with the article title (and besides, calling it the KJUHPANB is not even funny. Seriously, try to refrain from using acronyms unless it's for humor). My other suggestion is that maybe you can make a launch-lunch pun joke. This is my first time I had reviewed an article that had been so badly written, but I still consider it as redeemable.|
|Concept:||2||It is an unfinished concept indeed, but there are several problems with this concept and my solutions to it:
|Prose and formatting:||5||The formatting is really basic. There are only a few links, and most of them link to the North Korea article. And one of the links are red-linked. The large chunks of writing needs to be split into smaller paragraphs. Besides the problem with too little formatting, at least the templates are used really well. I noticed that the writer is up to something...
And I'll give off some suggestions from the box:
|Images:||2||Images are not properly used. There are images, but there are none on the main article. All of the images that did exist are in the template. What I suggest to do is to find images of Kim Jong-un at a buffet, or just your everyday image. Make a witty comment like "look at this chubby fat pig, said a Korean man". I know this comment is harsh, but if you can think of anything wittier than me I could give you a free pass.|
|Miscellaneous:||5.9||As compensation for my harsh criticism, I'll give this a score of 5.9. I couldn't say anything else, as the article is incomplete at the time of writing.|
|Final Score:||17.9||I suggest that you improve the article and create a new premise. From the looks of it, the article has a pretty average concept. But I'll give you leeway as you are only the first time that you wrote an article. Just keep trying and you'll become one of the writing gods!|
|Reviewer:|||Si Plebius Dato' (Sir) Joe ang Kyurem CUN|IC Kill | 12:45, April 14, 2012 (UTC)|