Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/John Travolta
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- What do you reckon?
Leviathan Guthrie, 22:06, November 7, 2012 (UTC)
|Humour:||7||While your obvious strength is UnNews articles, this is well-written and pretty amusing.
One thing though. Sarcasm is funny, but in my opinion it forms too much of this article's humor. Most of your jokes stem from being blatantly sarcastic, as is quickly apparent from your introduction. This is not that bad; lots of articles rely on sarcasm for humor. But if you want to get a feature, you'll have to mix it up a bit more. I've read your UnNews, which are fantastic, so I know it's not beyond you.
Try to mix in some other humorous stuff besides the sarcasm. One idea, is you could make the article's voice (who is defending Travolta throughout the article) come up with some really convoluted explanations for why all these accusations are false, instead of just saying 'that's obviously wrong'.
|Concept:||8||It's a strong concept and you've done pretty well with it.|
|Prose and formatting:||7||The prose is great, but the formatting has a few ugly bits. More specifically, the 'chat' section and the youtube vid. They break up the article and don't look very nice.
Also, add some categories.
|Images:||6.5||The images are not bad. Again, try to steer away from too much pure sarcasm in the captions.|
|Final Score:||36||Focus a bit less on obvious sarcasm. Experiment a bit with the sections and images to make it look nicer. Keep working at it, and it could be feature-able.|
|Reviewer:||--Snippy 05:12, November 25, 2012 (UTC)|