Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Joe Shlabotnik

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     Chompy domo-kun-small Mcpee Go Crazy Canadian flag icon Awards ~ Contribs ~ Gallery ~ Piglet 20:06, January 30, 2011 (UTC)

Okay, I'm reviewing this one. --Mr.Soot Gremlin Soot Gremlin-Talk 23:28, February 3, 2011 (UTC)

Humour: 2 I didn't really find much of this funny. Most of it seems random and just silly, which isn't going to get this article anywhere. HTBFANJS is something you really should look at. To begin, "Faggotville Faggots" doesn't make it funny. You should take that out and replace it with something a bit craftier. The AIDS joke I found just kind of weird. You should probably get that one out of there. The links to things like Nobody cares and the random links at the bottom don't really make it funnier either. I strongly suggest adding some sections to this article, and maybe a quote or two. I always find I can be pretty creative with quotes. Otherwise, I'm sorry, but if you're looking to get this to VFH (I'm not sure if you are), then humor is something you're really going to have to work on.
Concept: 5.5 The concept is pretty good. You could do a lot with a character in Peanuts, so take advantage of it.
Prose and formatting: 5 This is another place where you need to clean up. There are uncapitalized letters in "Playing Career" and the height and weight, spaces inbetween the last sentence in "Playing Career" and "Fan Base", and a picture just sitting there on the bottom. Get those cleaned up, and it'll look a whole lot better. Also, add more sections, please. Just three won't cut it.
Images: 4 I'm not sure if the picture of Joe is the best one. You could try something a bit more cartoony, maybe. I just think that might fit it a little better. If you don't want to, then I'd say add in some action shots of him, if you can. And please get rid of that old man photo. It's just weird. In short, add more, but make them good.
Miscellaneous: 3.5 Where I see this article.
Final Score: 20 Really work on the humor, dude. I think you can save this thing, but right now it's in really bad shape. Remember: read HTBFANJS. And don't give up.
Reviewer: --Mr.Soot Gremlin Soot Gremlin-Talk 00:07, February 4, 2011 (UTC)
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