My first 100% from scratch article, just want to know whether it's any good.
Aquaseal 20:24, 31 March 2009 (UTC)
First thing that leaped into my mind upon clicking the article was "Oh My God it has an Oscar Wilde quote." Now, they may look funny at first, but Oscar Wilde quotes are horribly overdone. As for your first quote, perhaps you could have some important celebrity salesman peddling the sponge, as opposed to "some salesguy". After that, The article seems rather lukewarm, except for the images, and I'll get to those later. Perhaps if you changed how you presented the jesus sponge (Except for the formula you made up, that was pretty good) you could make this article shine. (pun intended)
I think you could go a ways with the concept of this article, But it's by no means the most original idea I've ever seen. Perhaps an obscure and thorough celebrity endorsement?
Prose and formatting:
There are some grammatical and punctuation errors in this article, and while not crippling, could efinately use some work.
By far the funniest part of your article was The images. I liked the Chopped jesus on the sponge, and Cleaning off the "evil" photo of hitler was good too. You would get a 9, but the final image is in my opinion, not that humorous.
I think this article has the potential to be good, but you really need to find a purpose with this one, it sort of seems to meander in places. Other than that, Best of luck with this one!