Fun little article. It's been reviewed recently, but I want more opinions. Remember that parts of this article are Randomly Generated, so take that into account. Le Cejak•<-> 01:25, 22 September 2007 (UTC)
Very funny. I liked it a lot, the main danger is incoherence. See endnotes.
It's odd, I had expected -- given the title -- that the concept would involve Emile Zola and social consciousness. But it's a game of Clue/Cluedo.
I think the main danger is that the narrator's style veers, every so slightly, toward stream-of-consciousness at times. This can be difficult for some readers to comprehend -- it can be confusing. I might counsel you to be as clear as you can in the writing. Good luck -- ----OEJ 17:02, 23 September 2007 (UTC)