Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Insane Men

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edit Insane Men

Psychotic Spartan 19:07, June 25, 2010 (UTC)

I'll do it. --User:magic man 7:06, June 25, 2010 (UTC)


Humour: 2 First i would like to say that some of the stuff in this review my seem mean, but i'm not trying to be mean. I'm just trying help you to make your article the best it can (& get the ICU off it) so now that i've said that, i'd like to start. Ok so the humor in your article is pretty bad. It ranges from making fun of pedophilia, to suicide, to bestiality (ya when you said those things it came across as you were trying to make fun of them). Witch are bad points to touch on and the jokes them self's wern't even that funny. Like pedifelia is bad because it's a real problem that most people would consider... horrific. For example if a Pedophile were to steal a child it would emotionality scar them for life (if they aren't killed). Also when you made fun of pedophilia you came across as a jerk (witch is bad). It's pretty much the same with suicide as with pedophilia (you came across as a jerk). Now as for the bestiality joke, bestiality (in my opinion) isn't really that "horrific", but it is quite disgusting. Plus most people (my self included) try not to think about that sort of thing. Also some of your jokes were crude & rude And the last thing that i'd like to touch on is at one point in you article you said "to be a woman is to be insane" an even though i'm not a woman, i do think that if a woman were to read that she might be offended.
Concept: 8 I thought the concept of your article was good. It really has potentiol. That bing said it will take a bit of work for you to fix it.
Prose and formatting: 9 This was the article's real strength. The sections were in a good order & had good names.
Images: 0 Well you didn't have any. So i would say you need some. But as a great uncyclopedian once told me "the images should go along with the article, not the other way around".
Miscellaneous: 0 The one line i really liked in your article was in the section "Symptoms of Insanity" it said the insane man "Reads Uncyclopedia's Articles: he's a novelist"
Final Score: 19 Well the article needs work & it will take some work on your part, but like i said before your article has real potentiol & you can fix it. Hope i helped.
Reviewer: --Magic man 01:46, June 26, 2010 (UTC)
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