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John Lennon's Imagine changed from utopian communism to libertarian capitalism. Basically, a bunch of jokes that libertarians will laugh at, but I hope the irony is amusing enough for everyone else. -- Kip > Talk Works Puzzle Potato Dry Brush CUN Icons-flag-us 17:06, Apr. 4, 2012

I don't know how to fill out that thing below, as it all looks very complex. Anyway, the lyrics are rather awesome. There should be a reference to the FED in there maybe, but maybe not... I thought "monopolies" could sound more like "living life in piece" but have probably forgotten how the song goes anyway...
"At the time, the IRS confiscated all the money the album made to show who had the bigger dick." Obviously nothing wrong with referencing penis, especially when it's bigger than expected, but WTF are you talking about man. The rest of the intro is "OK" but not good enough to get it near the front page. Needs to be a lot more smooth subtle and slick. Like my penis. Obviously someone who can actually sing needs to do the vocals at some point. :-)
MrN9000 - Patented Rubbish review... END.

Someone else please give Kip a "proper" review as I'm far to lazy to do so. MrN Icons-flag-gb HalIcon.png WhoreMrn.png Fork you! 17:38, Apr 4

Thanks for the "monopolies" line, but I moved it up to the next verse. I generally listen to the song everytime I write it. You can "Imagine" how exhausted I am of that piano score.
The "bigger dick" is kind of a "The IRS owns you" macho man thing. In the early 90s, Willie Nelson got into trouble for not paying his taxes, so the IRS took all the money from his album Who Will Buy My Memories? I changed it to marijuana for the sake of humour, and to reference the very real pot-legalizing protest group, Willie Nelson's Teapot Party.
How ironic, given the subject and parody material, that a British person was the first one to touch upon this? Obviously, not as ironic as modern 'Tea Party' activists siding with the Tories. -- Kip > Talk Works Puzzle Potato Dry Brush CUN Icons-flag-us 03:16, Apr. 5, 2012
Got you. The Willie Nelson stuff makes a lot of sense now. Tories? Whigs? Left? Right? Who stole my tea, and more to the point who controls the production of tea! That's what I care about. MrN Icons-flag-gb HalIcon.png WhoreMrn.png Fork you! 03:30, Apr 5
Tea? Bah! Thstcher brand whisky is what I drink. There is no alternative. -- Kip > Talk Works Puzzle Potato Dry Brush CUN Icons-flag-us 03:46, Apr. 5, 2012

:::::You call that a review? I'll do this in four different ways: long, short, deep and wide. And copied from the above. GiratinaOriginForme |Si Plebius Dato' (Sir) Joe ang Pinoy CUN|IC Kill 800px-Flag of the Philippines svg | 22:18, April 7, 2012 (UTC)

I'm not doing it. GiratinaOriginForme |Si Plebius Dato' (Sir) Joe ang Pinoy CUN|IC Kill 800px-Flag of the Philippines svg | 07:20, April 8, 2012 (UTC)
Humour: 7.5 If we haven't had a parody of Imagine yet than it's well overdue.

I like the whole concept. Reviewing an Untune is a bastard of a thing to do though, so this is likely to be a short review.

One thing that I would like to see is more of an approach like Wikipedia:Imagine (song). The original was and is a big deal. So many things have been based on that song and it has been the anthem for a lot of the peace movement since its recording. I'd like to see the same here.

The Willie Nelson reference was news to me as well, and as such it seems to just come across as a random name drop.

The concept is funny, and the work you've put into the lyric shows. The problem is it feels too short. Not the song itself, but the full article. Such a huge topic it feels like it needs more in regards to how much influence it has had.

Concept: 7.5 What I just said in humour goes here too.
Prose and formatting: 7 No issues in format or spelling as far as I can tell. There is one line that bugs me:

But I'm not. I am rational

I think the original song lyric there is but I'm not the only one and the full stop breaks the flow. I'm thinking as a possible alternative is But I am the rational one or But I'm the rational one. That's my thinking on it all.

Images: 7 Can we do a parody of the original album cover?
Miscellaneous: 7 Sorry it's a short one. It's a hard one to review - UnTunes are always a nightmare to review. My major concern with this is that it needs more content. For a seminal song like this it needs something more.
Final Score: 36
Reviewer:                               Puppy's talk page12:34 21 Apr

My original vision was this with a colorful Gadsden flag snake in place of John Lennon's face. However, when Magic man presented the simple snake on there, I thought it looked cool.
Now that I think about it, it might work better more as a straight article, since I don't see anyone singing this anytime soon. I feel the humour should comes mostly from the fact that Imagine is a song about a utopian brotherhood society, while Imagine No Taxes is the antithesis by being from the perspective of a selfish money-loving rugged individualism. It would probably help if I actually read Atlas Shrugged.
The anthem theme will fit with the fact that Ayn Rand herself famously called libertarians the hippies of the right. Keeping with this concept, Bob Black famously called libertarians just "Republicans who like to do drugs", so the Willie Nelson, Tea Party and Rand Paul's Aqua Buddha jokes can flow more organically.
I still believe it's possible to have this be an actual song if I can get someone to sing the lyrics over a karaoke track of Imagine in the style of John Lennon's voice.
I think I have a project on my hands! It's a shame I didn't start this months before Tax Day. The perfect day for a feature. -- Kip > Talk Works Puzzle Potato Dry Brush CUN Icons-flag-us 12:20, Apr. 21, 2012
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