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I would like some opinions on my Ideal Hardware Store article. Is it funny? What could be added to it to make it funnier, and most importantly, to make it be not deleted? TV4Fun 22:30, 1 November 2007 (UTC)

Hey TV, welcome to uncyc. Thank you for having the balls to come on to pee review and trying to make this a better place! --  Le Cejak <-> 13:58, 4 November 2007 (UTC)

This is a quick and dirty review since the page is ICU and needs help quick. --  Le Cejak <-> 14:08, 4 November 2007 (UTC)
Humour: 5 The mathematics of the store goes completely over my head. It's okay to have some math in there (we like facts made funny here at Uncyc, but we would never admit it), but not a whole friggin' page of it.
Concept: 9 I think that, if rewritten, the ideas for all the things that the store sells could be pretty funny. You would have to make each its own little section. A store just for physics students? Cool.
Prose and formatting: 6 It's just a big block of text.
Miscellaneous: 5 avg of all your other scores.
Final Score: 25 Okay, please elongate this article and make it less random. What is the rule of randomness? When I look at the title, does the sentence I'm reading come off as a total surprise? Also, here are some tips:
  • Talk about each thing sold at the store in its own section.
  • How does the store acquire it's merchandise? That would be a fun section to read, or you cold explain each item individually.

I hope I helped! Call me!

Reviewer:   Le Cejak <-> 14:07, 4 November 2007 (UTC)
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