I've really revamped this while trying to keep the original style and concept. Corrected alot of grammar errors, rewritten alot of stuff that wasn't working and just bad written english text (that was a joke). I've toned down the long winded sentences so hopefully I've got it up to VFH standard. Hope you enjoy reviewing.—The preceding signed comment was added byProjectmayhem666 (talk • contribs). 13:50, 12 March 2009 (UTC)
That was actually pretty good. It's somewhat of a one-trick pony, what with the constant swearing and use of slang. Still, I was amused at the concept, and you executed it better than the title of the article would expect you too.
A C for originality. Don't get me wrong, you did a decent job of executing the concept, but the concept itself has been used a thousand times, if only terribly.
Prose and formatting:
The weakest part of the article. The paragraphs laying on top of each other and the grammatical problems turned me off a bit. Even if it was part of the joke, it can only go to a certain extent. Translate your article from Engrish to English, make the execution a bit smoother, and it should be a hell of a lot better.
Not much can be said about these, but the captions are alright. Still, it could be much better with some photoshopped images here and there.
With such an overused concept, i'm surprised this article didn't suck beyond belief. With a spell check, a format revision, and a few more humo(u)rous images, this could probably be VFH material.