Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/ICondom

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--CRφssCrossfiresiggy1FIRE© 21:11, 1 June 2008 (UTC)

Humour: 2 It only touches on what could be a very funny article. What you should do is go back and review over it, correct any and all grammar and spelling mistakes, and DEFINITELY DEFINITELY DEFINITELY add more to it. In fact, if you can't think of anything more to add to it, this article should just be merged into the iPod article.
Concept: 5 It's a good idea, but like I said, unless you can make it into some outrageously funny article, it should probably just be merged with iPod.
Prose and formatting: 1 The way the article is written, it is pretty much on the verge of complete chaos. Half of it is just a list, which, as stated in HTBFANJS, does not make for a good article. The rest of it is simply a compilation of random notes, which is not very funny either.
Images: 7.5 The images are really the only funny thing about this article. The top two images are probably the only things keeping this article out of VFD, because the bottom two would not really add anything to the article without the captions. If this article is to survive, I suggest you concentrate more on the actual content than the images.
Miscellaneous: 5 Yeah.
Final Score: 20.5 Like I said, this should probably be merged with iPod.
Reviewer: * Flumpa Quotes.PNG 21:43, 1 June 2008 (UTC)

Humour: 3 As far as I know at one point Uncyclopedia was so drenched with iEverything people just stopped caring those articles anymore. This is like a re-enactment of history - with savings!
Concept: 4 I don't know how much i-Stuff people can possibly make up, but as far as I know there is only one Apple and only a small fraction their product names do start with an "i". Now, which particular product is iCondom supposed to allude to or lampoon? Is it supposed be satirical about Apple's attitude towards marketing, their customers or security requirements? And, most importantly, was there supposed to a concept to begin with? Because, as far as I can see, there are only shreds of it scattered all over the map, and that's just not pretty.
Prose and formatting: 3 You should be glad that someone is actually reviewing this instead of, say, sending it straight to the deletion hell. There is no introduction, no coherent contents, no resemblance to a decent article, no links and no nothing. I gave you a 3 nonetheless because I am too soft to give people a zero.
Images: 6 I like the fact that someone went through that much trouble to put the Apple logo on a condom foil wrap, although it's a shame that such a nice picture doesn't even have a funny article or even a remotely funny description to go with.
Miscellaneous: 4 N/A
Final Score: 20 Another thirteen-in-a-dozen iArticle. Seriously, think about what I said about the concept and work on it. You can't just make up an iProduct and expect people to laugh with you without giving them a single thing that they can actually relate to in real life. A good sense of humor comes a long way, and I don't think anyone here is willing to say they are the authority in this regard. Nonetheless, think about what you can say about Apple or any one of their products and see if you can incorporate the idea into your article. That'll be a good start.
Reviewer: JoeMonco 22:00, 1 June 2008 (UTC)
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