Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Hyperdrinking

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Yet another review request. I've done another re-write job on this, and think it's a definite improvement. However, I also thing there's further improving to do, so a constructive review would be most welcome. I tried to leave some of the original text in place, but should the quote go? Should the intro be re-written? Any suggestions for new sections? Any other ideas? Anything? Anyone? Hello? --Sir Under User (Hi, How Are You?) VFH KUN 12:48, 27 September 2007 (UTC)

Humour: 6 I laughed here and there, but it's not a gut-buster.
Concept: 7 Heh. Getting drunk is always fun.
Prose and formatting: 5 The concept is good, but the prose needs work. It doesn't read like an encyclopedia article.
Images: 5 Only the two images, and the beer belly one is disturbing. There HAS to be something better out there.
Miscellaneous: 5 Good start, just give 'er more lovin'!
Final Score: 28 It's getting late, and I'm just trying to clear out old Pee Review requests. Pardon my brevity, but at least I'm being honest.
Reviewer:     EugeneKay wuz here (whine thank)   04:33, 15 October 2007 (UTC)  
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