I like to write a lot of things, I’m pretty good at Pee Reviews, and the only award I had even gotten was a Author of the Month Award. Also I like Avenged Sevenfold, Modern Warfare 2, Halo 3, and brunettes and emo girls.
I have to say the concept is doubtlessly perfect. You chose a concept and stuck with it without ever drawing away from it. I don’t see any reason to criticize about the concept as there is nothing to criticize.
Prose and Formatting:
The way you wrote the article was good. You keep the information like a HowTo and kept it from being too listy. I’ve seen a few people who do that, and I’m glad you’re not one of them.
You do, however, have a few spelling and grammar errors. For example, you misspelled rumors and chose the wrong word for lightning. I suggest reading over the article to look for these mistakes, as well as using the spell check system on Microsoft Word. Or better yet you can use the proofreading service, so someone can fix these mistakes for you.
Not much to say about the humor section except I had a few lols with it. Maybe 2 or 3 more ideas wouldn’t hurt, but other than that the Humor is fine as it is.
The images support your article well. There’s nothing much to criticize except that you should make the second image a little bigger, as it is smaller than how it should be desirably viewed. Also I think you should have an image of Satan of some sort In the Pray to Satan section, as well as a dead corpse around the “You Have Died” section.
My overall grade of this article.
Pretty good. Nothing seriously wrong with this article. The only things that need work is the spelling and adding more images as mention earlier, other than that a very nice article. Since this was on the HowTo: namespace page I don’t see why this shouldn’t be on the front page. If you have any questions/comments, just go to my talk page and I’ll be happy to answer them. Good Luck! Cheers!
Well, that's one heck of a review! Unfortunately, I can't think of any more ideas. Added a Satan image, but I think a corpse might ruin the mood. For the record, I meant to spell "humour" like that, since it's applied the story takes place in England. (Except "favorite" is still in the American spelling, since that joke will mostly appeal to Americans.) Regardless, I took a spellcheck and changed all the other mispelled words. --Kip > Talk•Works•• 20:53, Mar. 23, 2010