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edit HowTo:Remove a washing machine from the face of the earth

To potential reviewer, this is my first pee review submission so please don't urinate on my shoes, in my ear is OK.--Elydavis 20:25, 18 April 2008 (UTC) Elydavis 20:25, 18 April 2008 (UTC)

Humour: 7 Nicely done. A fairly random topic, but it was fun. I've made a few pipe bombs myself back in the day, so I had a bit of a personal connection to this. Except for the second section. The whole reference to Deliverance seemed to come out of nowhere. I get how you're trying to imply a sexual aspect to blowing shit up (don't all the best pyros jerk off while their fires burn?) but with no lead in to this section, the whole thing seems a little out of place. It might work a little better if you can work up to it a bit. Add a subtle phycho-sexual innuendo or two to the first section so the second section's not such a non sequitor.
Concept: 7 It's a random and silly concept. I've got no problem with it myself, in fact I enjoy silly humor quite a bit. But you should prepare yourself for a "it's too random" comment or two. Ignore them. This is random done right.
Prose and formatting: 8 Pretty good for the most part. There's a few thing in italics that probably shouldn't be, but that's easy enough to fix. You might want to do something about the Ned Beatty and "Purty Mouth" dude pics, the way they're laid out right now leaves a lot of empty space and empty space makes for an ugly article. Again, easy enough fix. I liked the surprise explosion section consisting of only the image, nice touch.
Images: 6 They're appropriate enough for the article, but none of them really provoke any real laughs. I wouldn't worry about it too much though. What you've got will work until inspiration hits.
Miscellaneous: 7 Averaged. I'm told that's how this bit works. You should probably ditch the section detailing what else you've written. Vanity in your articles doesn't go over too well. That's what your user page is for.
Final Score: 35 HowTo articles are fun. As a matter of fact, one that I've written is currently up for VFH. *nudge nudge wink wink*. Have fun and good luck. If you have any questions feel free to hit my talk page.
Reviewer: OptyC Sucks! Icons-flag-us CUN23:22, 18 Apr
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