Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/HowTo:Pick up female nerds

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You must approve this article! Review it now, or you will become a dick. GiratinaOriginForme |Si Plebius Dato' (Sir) Joe ang Pinoy CUN|IC Kill 800px-Flag of the Philippines svg | 03:20, 8 January 2009 (UTC)

It's a pretty good concept, really, and I'm surprised by how fresh and clean the article is. However, I'm not going to review it because a) you told me to approve of it, and b) you told me I would otherwise be a dick. I responded the same way I do when I see you write "vote for this article or I will kill you!" or whatever other iteration is used. Basically what I'm trying to say is, be nicer and more humble and your articles might have more of a chance. And also, expand this article because it is too short to be featured. IronLung 05:45, 8 January 2009 (UTC)
I got this one, I love reviewing stubs, its much less work for me. --Mnbvcxz 06:42, 8 January 2009 (UTC)
Concept: 4 First off, I highly recommend that you don't post stubs on pee review. Generally, a "mainspace" article should be no shorter than 5 kilobytes in length. The only exceptions would be some articles that look like things they are about. If you post a stub, the reviewer will often spend most the review telling you to simply flesh out your article. Additionally, the reviewer will wonder if you are even capable of writing more than a stub. (I'm not trying to insult you here, I have reviewed some writers who apparently just can't write.) Finally, it is very difficult to judge the formatting quality of stub, or the article that stub should turn into. Many formatting problems may arise or disappear when you expand it to full article length.

The subject matter has some potential, and do avoid randomness and similar error. However, your "take" on it could use some work. Your main problem is that your covering the material too fast and with bad flow. It almost feels like a collection of cliche one liners. This might go away when you flesh it out, or might be worse. Try to cover the material more slowly.

Additionally, you seem to be covering too much information, in addition to covering it too quickly. At times, it almost feel like your filibustering.
Prose and Formatting: 4 I don't see any glaring problem, but, I am always hesitant to give stubs a high score, because of the potential of formatting errors to arise. Additionally, you do have some formatting issues:

No See also section generally, an article should have a "see also" section at the end. It adds length, and is expected.

Too many short paragraphs if your case, this is caused by covering the information too quickly. Try to add more material.

Headers too close together this may or may not go away if you flesh out your article. If you have too many headers, demote some to sub-headers, or get rid of them entirely. If you find you can't get rid of the headers, it is a sign that you are covering the material too quickly.
Images: 5.5 The images are a bit cliche or not very nerdy. There is more to being nerdy than just glasses. I'd suggest you try to find more nerdy girls. The picture of the fat guy is overused. Its funny, but a bit cliche, I'd advise not using it.
Humour: 3.5 Overall, the humor is quite cliche. Now it is important to have what the reader expects, but you generally need some originality to the article. Some of that might go away when you flesh it out, or it might not. I'm not familiar with your writing skills, so I don't know if it will get better when you expand it or not.
Improvability Score: 4 This article will probably be relatively easy to improve. But, there isn't much there right now. Again, I would suggest adding text to the existent material, and see what happens.
Final Score: 21 A final note, this is nowhere near an article that I would boast about. Its an ok base, but its not even ready for pee review. Don't boast about your accomplishments unless you have something to boast about, it only makes you look silly.
Reviewer: --Mnbvcxz 07:19, 8 January 2009 (UTC)
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