Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/HowTo:Not Give A Shit

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Hey, maybe you will give enough shit to want to review this. But if all you want to do is bash it, I don't give a shit about what you have to say. (ok, maybe I do. For the sake of making this article better.)

SaltyKid 13:52, September 26, 2009 (UTC)

Humour: 7 Some of the jokes could have been fleshed out and made funnier. For example, "Well then you must be dumber than a box of rocks" can be changed to "Well then you must be dumber than a {{Noun}}" so that it is always a random and different noun every time you read it. Also, fat cops are all too common. Why not something a little out of the ordinary, such as an Amish Heavy metal singer or an anorexic chef; maybe "just think {{Adj}} {{Noun}}" or something.
Concept: 10 I liked the concept of teaching people how to not give a shit, despite not giving a shit yourself. That's probably the artcle's strongest asset, in my opinion. It just needs a little bit better execution.
Prose and formatting: 9 The grammar is a bit rough in parts of the preamble. "You got" should be "You've got" if using present tense. You don't need to capitalize every word in the headlines; it's a little hard on the eyes. Also, it could use a few more links, maybe "your life sucks" should link to George W. Bush or Kevin Federline or Paris Hilton.
Images: 6 Some of the images don't really serve the article that well. Maybe replace Freddie Mercury (one of rock's great frontmen) with a really random picture (say, File:Winkler2.jpg or File:Ualuealualeualueale.gif or my own pics File:Poirot Kel.jpg and File:Kenan.jpg) or make your own over-the-top, don't-give-a-shit image using Photoshop, GIMP, or MS Paint if you must; I'd prefer GIMP since it's free and doesn't suck like MS Paint. The giraffe/graph was funny, but was also used in the Krusty Krab Training Video episode of Spongebob. It also could have used more images and more captains, maybe a funny one-liner -- those can easily make or break an image.
Miscellaneous: 9 The sections are too short and could be made a little bit longer. Make your not-giving-a-shit a little more elaborate and wordy to make sections longer and then when you get to "Will this article... really help me?" you can keep the short sections as is.
Final Score: 41 I didn't see any other problems with the article. It's a great article, it just needs a little improvement. You should start by reading HTBFANJS and Beginner's Guide again, and checking out Uncyclopedia:Best of for some inspiration. Good luck with it.
Reviewer: PF4Eva, the King of Imagination talk Contributions 16:52, September 26, 2009 (UTC)
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