Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/HowTo:Make money without getting a job

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edit HowTo:Make money without getting a job

Mainly looking for any other absurd money making scheme that wouldn't actually be classified as a job, opinion of the pictures; any suggestions at all, basically. --Dexter111344 15:15, 29 December 2007 (UTC)

I don't feel like reviewing, but I have an idea for another scheme. You could challenge somebody to an obscene 1920's wager! Around the world in 80 days? Race across the sands of arabia? Either way, you need a picture a a guy with a curly mustache. - UnIdiot | GUN | Talk | Contribs - 20:24, Dec 29
Don't forget a cape and a top hat! - P.M., WotM, & GUN, Sir Led Balloon Baloon(Tick Tock) (Contribs) 20:35, Dec 29
Humour: 7 Very good humor. But may I suggest the following ways to improve it even more?:
  1. You should include a section explaining why you don't need a job ("Why work all day when you can mug old ladies for a living!") instead of immediately criticizing this silly proposal. Remember, be serious about silly things, and this is a silly proposal to make money without getting a "real" job, so be serious about it! Or even vice versa! I'm contradicting myself!
  2. Get rid of that section telling the reader he has no life. Those jokes get stale, as we all know that we are addicted to uncyclopedia, and don't need anyone to tell us those things.
  3. Though I did contradict myself when I said be silly/serious, you should try writing it in a way that accommodates both, such as my Why?:Stick Things in the Electrical Outlet I'm such a whore. Shorten the heading titles to the method instead of Method 1 make it Rob a Bank.
  4. Make it like an infomercial! We all laugh at those over dramatized infomercials: "Try New Colon Cleanse! Tastes great and will clear up that constipation or your money back!"
  5. Needs a fulfilling ending. What if you, the jobless writer won the lottery? Or you could do the irony of all ironies and say, "Whoops! Almost late for work!".
Concept: 10 I still don't have a job! I've been getting by on allowances and birthday money for a long time!
Prose and formatting: 7 Put a little more meat on each section's bones. They're looking a bit scrawny. Again be serious in tone with this. Notice how we all laugh at those commercials that tell you can get rich quick just by working at home? It's cause they are serious about it. So stop mocking the reader and sell your get rich quick scheme to them instead.
Images: 8 Good images, could use a few more simple ones to balance it out.
Miscellaneous: 8 avg'd it
Final Score: 40 Good article. Ill be looking forward to seeing your changes. Ask me if you need any help. Since you know, I don't have a job....
Reviewer: --Blueflatcapsig Sir Unknown User (Talk : Cont : VFH : PEE : CUN) 18:41, 30 December 2007 (UTC)
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