I added a lot more PUTTY 23:17, December 2, 2010 (UTC)
You started well and there were certainly funny parts in it but some sections towards the end dragged it down a bit, you may wish to rewrite "The easy/hard way" and "Why wouldn't it get featured." May I suggest HTBFANJS.
Concept was great but I don't think you pushed it quite enough.
Prose and formatting:
Once again it seemed to deteriorate towards the end with sentences missing words and the grammar failing. "blank the page like a arrogant 12 who thinks there funny will tell there friends to read"
Not much to say here, the plane is good as a "don't do this" image.
Between the grammar and bedding/killing the admin's family it just didn't click with me.
I think you have a good idea going but it needs some work, maybe talk to an experience writer.