PUTTY 12:36, November 22, 2010 (UTC)
||I fear I didn't LOL. The jokes are there and well paced but only had me thinking "yeah, that's amusing." Needs more LOLs.
||A bit meta, but not unapproachably so.
|Prose and formatting:
||Not bad. Style works.
||I barely noticed them if at all. Not sure what to suggest here. Needs something though.
||Not quite front-page yet, needs more LOLs and some solution to the image problem. On the way though.
||David Gerard 00:21, November 23, 2010 (UTC)